雅思大作文范文及解析:提高驾驶者年龄

时间:2022-06-21 16:59:15  作者:网络 来源:网络

观点类大作文,交通类话题

 

Some people think the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

 

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题目大意

人们认为提升道路安全的最好办法是提升驾驶汽车和摩托车的法定最低年龄,你是否同意?

 

 

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思路解析

这是一道观点类大作文,讨论的提升道路安全的方式。题目理解上不难,审题时注意两点,一是题目观点的逻辑是“提高机动车驾驶者的最低年龄可以提升道路安全”,需要对这个逻辑进行论证,二是题目中出现了绝对词“the best way”,一般看到绝对词从反对角度切入会更合适。下面,月半鸭带大家一起来看下具体观点。

 

首先来看这个方案的合理性。

提出观点的人认为,提高驾驶者的最低年龄能够让驾驶者更加成熟,他们或许认为年龄更大的人比如成年人相较于青少年有更加成熟的判断力,能够更好的应对道路上会发生的突发情况,因此有助于减少意外事故的发生。

 

但是这样的观点漏洞也很明显,有三方面。

一是,观点并没有给出明确的年龄界限,如果说成年人相较于少年的判断力和控制力会更强,但是18岁、22岁或25岁之间有多少区别并没法论证,将年龄提升到多少合适是个问题。

二是,很多交通事故发生和年龄并无直接关系。驾驶机动车本身作为一个技术活,需要考验驾驶者的驾驶经验、对操作的熟练度、临场应变能力和心态等等,这些都需要通过大量的训练和实践来提升。一个年轻但经验丰富的驾驶者相较于一个年长但刚开车的人来说,可能可以更好避免交通事故。因此,单纯提高年龄要求并没有什么用。

三是,很多交通事故也并非机动车造成的,需要通过其他手段来改善保障道路安全。比如更合理的道路规划,将机动车和非机动车分隔开。提高对骑车者和行人的道路安全教育,以减少其乱穿马路和闯红灯的情况。诸如此类的手段都能提升道路安全。

 

 

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提纲

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高分范文示例

I shall argue in this essay that there is no correlation between road safety problems and how old an adult is permitted to drive cars or motorbikes; irrationalities should be seen in the claim made by the topic. 

 

The safety problems emerging in traffic are nothing correlated to how old an adult gets the driving license; mostly, whether the driving process is with or without security is mainly decided by the driving ability and focus of the drivers. For those who myopically link the two elements together, they may superficially recognize the phenomenon—indeed, there are young adults who just have been entitled to drive their cars causing a majority of traffic accidents. But the truth should be seen past: it is not the age that leads to those tragedies, but the lack of experience and instant reactions in dealing with complex transport situations. Those experienced drivers can feasibly manipulate their wheels to realize the smooth driving, or to avoid the potential hazards that are frequently coming along in their daily witnesses, but it is so hard for a “new-comer” to do exactly the same: they perform clumsily in making the judgement of the traffic flows in front, and are always busy with getting close to every instrument -reflecting mirrors, the handbrake, etc.—necessarily used in their safe driving. That means, whenever get the licenses, individuals would always suffer from the period of being the potential risky elements on the road. The policy in the claim, ergo, is extremely unreasonable to be proposed as a proper policy. 

 

Before scrutinizing what is the most proper way of dealing with road security, one must examine the rooted reasons lying behind related facts. Better choices should be made on launching programs or developing policies adhering to the true causes of the emergence of those accidents—what really makes the disorders of the traffic system, certainly, is not the age of those drivers, but factors concerning the driving skills and subtleties emerging during the driving procedure. Therefore, regulations are more suggested in bettering the training part during the driving license tests to make sure that newly qualified drivers would be more skilful in dealing with complex traffic situations, or in severely banning any distractions during the driving hours: a longer real road driving practice could be involved in the probation of drivers, to make sure that they won’t panic or mishandle the vehicles in some extreme circumstances; supervisions like cameras or cable televisions, are recommended on roads to keep watches on the drivers, to make sure they are not playing mobile phones during the driving. The aforementioned means, though with flaws, are definitely more effective than the action of absurdly increasing the age limit of drivers, since they are focusing more on the essence of the problem, but not the unrelated causes. 

 

In conclusion, I would very much agree that increasing the minimum age permission of driving is not the way of dealing with traffic safety since I too share the gift of foresight of seeing the essential cruxes of a problem. 

 

 

 

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相关词汇和语法结构

Correlation   关联

Irrationality   不合理性

Myopically   天真地

Superficially   肤浅地

Feasibly   切实地

Hazard   风险

Clumsily   笨拙地

Scrutinize   审视

Adhere to   坚守

Subtlety   细节

Probation   试用期

Absurdly   愚蠢地

Foresight   先见之明

Crux   症结

 

 

 

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